8:23 a.m. — Atlanta
Hello all. How are you? We are experiencing gorgeous Autumn weather here: blue skies, crisp, chilly temperatures, and leaves turning colours. Bring on the hot chocolate.
The instructions for today’s exercise are short: Write a poem of four quatrains that contains no adjectives, no adverbs, no similes, and the word “lime”.
That’s it. I knew I could write a short post. I am off for coffee…No? You would like a tiny bit more? Okay. A colleague and I included this prompt as an option in the final project of our tenth graders’ poetry unit. Few chose it, but the ones who did: Wow! What wonderful, creative, uncluttered poems they came up with.
Look at what you are being asked to do and think about why. What is the effect of leaving out qualifiers [similes qualify in the way they direct a comparison]? Ask yourself this before and after you write the poem.
If you need a kick-start, list all the situations where you might come across a lime. Choose the two or three you find interesting and jot notes next to each. Go with whatever your brain is telling you. Pick one. Remember that quatrains, while they mean four lines to a stanza, do not mean the lines have to be long, or even with each other. They do not have to rhyme. A quatrain is four lines. That’s it.
This is the only step you can be flexible with. If you need fewer or more stanzas, go for it. BUT: no qualifiers and the word lime must be in the poem somewhere. Think strong verbs and nouns. Don’t forget, sensory imagery is your friend.
I do hope many of you will try this. It is one of my favourite exercises to do and to read results of. Don’t forget to post either links, or the poem, in comments. Read what others have written. Enjoy and I will see you Friday for the prompt roundup, and next Tuesday for a less prescriptive prompt.
Happy writing everyone.
vivinfrance
01/11/2011 at 12:47 pm
I’ve made a start, but am suffering severe adjectival withdrawal symptoms!
margo roby
01/11/2011 at 12:57 pm
Suck it up, ViV! You can do it and you will feel so light and clean for it!
m
tmhHoover
02/11/2011 at 10:59 pm
I am afraid I was too. Thanks for coming by my blog and setting me straight!
C.L. Sostarich
01/11/2011 at 4:37 pm
This was a fun exercise Margo, thanks!
The lime looked at me
From the counter
Challenging my stare,
Cut me if you dare.
I crossed the room
Knife in hand
She rolled to the mixer,
Oh, I would fix her.
Mixer, basket, Mixer.
Rolling and running,
The knife glinted
My eyes squinted.
But I need your taste,
I said to her,
My guacamole will go to waste!
She smiled and said, well in that case…
margo roby
01/11/2011 at 5:32 pm
Carly, I love the poem. It is fun, isn’t it?!
margo
tmhHoover
02/11/2011 at 5:35 pm
Your lime and my lime need to get together. Nice job.
margo roby
02/11/2011 at 5:49 pm
Okay, the image of your lime and her lime racing around screaming will keep me smiling all evening!
m
vivinfrance
02/11/2011 at 5:45 pm
Such fun, and not a trace of describing words
vivinfrance
01/11/2011 at 5:15 pm
A non-poem http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com/2011/11/01/wot-no-adjectives/
catlas
01/11/2011 at 5:17 pm
Clouds and rain
I slipped on a lime
Trash on the ground
I fell on my spine
Help, I cry
Is anyone there?
The lime replies,
shall I fetch you a chair?
I hear the lime talking
To a stranger on the path,
“He can not stand,
You do the math!”
I close my eyes
Then open them again.
I am sitting in class
Where have I been?
margo roby
01/11/2011 at 5:33 pm
I love your lime’s persona, Catlas. Glad you had fun with it.
margo
catlas
01/11/2011 at 5:43 pm
I did! Thank you, Margo! 😀
pmwanken
01/11/2011 at 6:41 pm
OK. When I first read your prompt, the only words I could seem to type were adjectives and adverbs! And then…something “clicked.” LOL — I’ll hold you responsible! 😉
Here’s my poem “limes for margo” for you to savor! Ha!
margo roby
02/11/2011 at 10:20 am
Our brains are odd things aren’t they, Paula. I’m heading over now 🙂
margo
pmwanken
02/11/2011 at 4:27 pm
Yes…our brains are odd. And mine has turned off…or something.
margo roby
02/11/2011 at 5:48 pm
Join the crowd, Paula! I have never run into so many people with so many blocks and blanknesses, including myself. Something’s going on!
m
Mike Patrick
01/11/2011 at 7:51 pm
I find limes sensuous, don’t you?
margo roby
02/11/2011 at 10:20 am
Even the word lime, Mike.
margo
Janet
02/11/2011 at 11:12 am
Enjoyed…
Accolades and words of boast
are not testimonies sub-lime
to prove the things we love the most;
but how we spend our time
I thought of you the other day
And how you used to kiss me
Before you turned and walked away
Limes always do this to me
If life hands you its lemons
Then make some lemonade
If it hands you limes instead
Drizzle it on bean-salad
(it really is delicious on bean salad)
Do not keep score of failures
It is a waste of time
Sometimes life is the gravy
And sometimes salt and lime
Janet
02/11/2011 at 11:15 am
somehow the spaces between the four line-stanzas disappeared??? when I posted. I have trouble with the most basic things…like simply placing a link back to my blog. Sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn’t and I don’t know why…
margo roby
02/11/2011 at 11:21 am
Janet, I can’t help you with the link [computers are possibly black magic ;-)], but when you open a file to copy paste for posting, if you open in notepad, or wordpad, or whichever you have, the spacing remains as it should.
Love your clevernesses: “of boast”…uh huh. Thought I might not notice you getting around an adjective? “Sub-lime” is gorgeous! And not only have you managed a poem to the rules, but you have a moral!
margo
tmhHoover
02/11/2011 at 12:41 pm
Ok this was miserably hard for me… just sayin’. This is what I get for not trying the last two prompts. I so should have done the haibun or even the sensory circus prompt. Anyway here is my attempt… I think I surely used something forbidden in there. Just let me know -it would be appreciated. xo teri
Here is the link-
http://smallstonegatherer.blogspot.com/2011/11/lime-and-me.html
margo roby
02/11/2011 at 12:51 pm
Poor Teri 😦 I promise a formless, ruleless prompt next week 🙂 You do know you can still do the other two prompts, yes?
Going over to read what you wrote.
margo
tmhHoover
02/11/2011 at 11:12 pm
Margo -My husband will laugh when I tell him this. He claims I could use a bit more structure in my life. In the future I will try to only share my whining with my dog. Also Viv found an adjective hiding in the very first word of my poem. Can you believe it!? Go Viv.
wordsandthoughtspjs
02/11/2011 at 5:41 pm
Ok, well, this prompt should prove hard for me, Margo. I haven’t even completed last week’s prompt. One thing at a time. I have also decided to take on the PAD challenge, I must be crazy…
Pamela
margo roby
02/11/2011 at 5:46 pm
Well, maybe a little nuts, Pamela 😉 Though for this, if you read some of the others [and for this that’s okay — usually I don’t like to read others before I write mine, but this works], I don’t think you will find it so hard.
Deep breath.
margo
Patsy Black Sawyer
04/11/2011 at 9:31 pm
I scribbled mine quickly and I’m pretty sure it isn’t quiet right.. I did want to link though so that all my visitors might find you too.. I love the great prompts we find here.. Have a great day.. my attempt is here
margo roby
04/11/2011 at 9:36 pm
Thank you so much, Patsy. I appreciate it and will head over now to read the poem.
margo