Place and Hold for Next

06 Jun

One thing I have found about trying a daily prompt: I pretty much have to go with what comes out of my mind, even if that hadn’t been my plan on starting. Miz Q has given us three word lists, from which we are to use one, two, and three words in a poem about place (then save the words because there will be more).

I forgot the place part, happily chose my six words and whipped them into a short poem of sorts. Then the part of the brain that lies in wait for this sort of thing, said: Place? I kept the six words I had chosen, originally — that was my challenge to myself. The poem is metaphorical because that was the only way I could work place in.

When You’re Not in Kansas Anymore

When life is no longer a sprint
to the finish line. When you
look down your lane — marked
with its measured white —
and the tape is fuzzed. When
the track’s surface is no longer
smooth, you have a choice.
You can limp, or crawl, your way
to the end, or you can flatten death
with respect and a sledgehammer.



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24 responses to “Place and Hold for Next

  1. Misky

    06/06/2015 at 10:29 am

    Yes, a sledgehammer. That’s what I need; knock myself into shape. I’ll borrow yours, if you don’t mind. xx

    • margo roby

      06/06/2015 at 10:40 am

      You may have it.

      • Misky

        06/06/2015 at 11:04 am

        I decided to rewrite using six of the words…

        • margo roby

          06/06/2015 at 11:05 am

          Gnawing at you was it?

          • margo roby

            06/06/2015 at 11:09 am

            You are posting it or you have only made the decision and would I please back off?

          • Misky

            06/06/2015 at 11:09 am


            • margo roby

              06/06/2015 at 11:15 am

              … and drifting. The two are compulsory. Chains and a candle optional.

              • Misky

                06/06/2015 at 11:17 am

                How very Dickensian.

                • margo roby

                  06/06/2015 at 11:19 am

                  We try our best.

    • barbcrary

      06/06/2015 at 11:27 am

      Sledgehammers are not the appropriate remedy for fuzzy. Just saying.

      • margo roby

        06/06/2015 at 11:35 am

        Yeh, but if you want to keep that fuzziness at bay… Whap!

      • Misky

        06/06/2015 at 1:18 pm

        I’m kinda pouty that I’ve been tagged with this fuzzy name. (pout)

        • barbcrary

          06/06/2015 at 1:24 pm

          You’ve been tagged? I thought it was self-referential. Fuzzy is cuddly and nice. Like a duckling in a pond. Or something

        • margo roby

          07/06/2015 at 9:37 am

          No, no. You’re (snort). b is fuzzy.

          • Misky

            07/06/2015 at 6:34 pm

            Okay. I can cope with snort.

  2. barbcrary

    06/06/2015 at 11:28 am

    Also, Margo, serendipity and synergy and all those fine “s” words in addition to sledgehammer. I like where you went with this. 🙂


    06/06/2015 at 11:46 am

    Oh Margo, those last two lines….I couldn’t even lift a sledgehammer!

    • margo roby

      06/06/2015 at 11:50 am

      Oh, ViV, that made me laugh. How about a metaphorical sledgehammer? (yes, I am bad)

  4. whimsygizmo

    06/06/2015 at 12:45 pm

    NICE. Love the whomp of that sledgehammer.

    Your explanation of the prompt has me thinking I misunderstood how many words to use (I used one from each group.) Oh, well. Ya’ll know by now, I DON’T do numbers. 😉

  5. julespaige

    06/06/2015 at 12:52 pm

    Got retirement on the brain do we?

    o.O oops I misread the instructions…
    I only sort of followed Q partly and added a twist so it isn’t a ‘sad day’ after all:

  6. Hannah Gosselin

    06/06/2015 at 4:47 pm

    Oh my goodness!! Your closing caused a great laugh and a big hooray!! That’s the way! 🙂

  7. Candy

    06/06/2015 at 7:03 pm

    A sledgehammer- how marvelous

  8. Vagrant Rhodia

    07/06/2015 at 7:06 am

    Thanks for the reminder for me to fix my own as well 😀 Love your place poem Part II


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