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Yin Yang Poem for We Write Poems

27 Apr

Dear regulars: this is an extra posting. I am responding to the We Write Poems prompt which asked us to Write a yin/yang poem based on any kind of pairings that are complementary. A few examples include Black/White, Sweet/Sour, Hands/Feet, Presence/Absence, or we were invited to create and write about other pairings as we saw fit to illustrate. Even the format of the poem might be a demonstration of such pairings itself.

Pulled for revision.

Regulars, I will see you tomorrow for more on words to avoid, and Friday for the week’s roundup.

 
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Posted by on 27/04/2011 in exercises, poetry, writing

 

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8 responses to “Yin Yang Poem for We Write Poems

  1. Donald Harbour

    27/04/2011 at 9:55 am

    Well, this was interesting. A juxtaposition of night and day of orbs, sleep and awakening, torment and peace. Ahh, so much to read into it, so little said. Margo it would appear you are Mayan, in nature that is, maybe a previous spiritual existence. Enjoyed the verse.
    Regards,
    Don

     
    • margo roby

      27/04/2011 at 10:00 am

      I enjoyed working on this and thank you, Don, for the observations. From your comments you seem to have read quite a bit of what I didn’t say, but had in mind. I will now go research [and thank goodness you clarified Mayan]. I will take this moment to say I have kept several of your poems this week in my inbox to reread. I have particularly enjoyed your latest crop.
      Regards,
      margo

       
  2. Sheila Moore

    27/04/2011 at 6:28 pm

    I love this! Been thinking about writing my first diamante and since this is the third one I have come across in the last week, I think I am being nudged to write one NOW. Thanks for contributing to my inspiration πŸ™‚

     
    • margo roby

      27/04/2011 at 7:06 pm

      My pleasure, Sheila! Let me see the result when you have one πŸ™‚

       
  3. neil reid

    28/04/2011 at 5:28 am

    Interesting! I like this. Wanna think about it more, what it is, where it might also go. Interested, yes. So it’s all smoke and mirrors huh? πŸ™‚

    And funny thing was I understood it before I did. (or, what my eyes knew took my brain a moment to realize!) Amusing to observe!

    Regards format, there’s an easy cheat to sidestep HTML. Do what you want with what text processor you like, then simply take a screen snapshot of what you want and post it as an image instead of text. Sometimes childish paws know what to do!

    Thank you margo.

     
    • margo roby

      28/04/2011 at 8:22 am

      Thank God for childish paws! I will try that [you don’t know the extent of my tech inabilities] and I will post another way it can look.
      Well, maybe not all but smoke and mirrors certainly abound. Ah, the brain. Funny how it works.
      I would love to hear any more thoughts should you have them. I like the poem, but not sure where to go with it.
      And, thank you, Neil.

       
  4. James

    29/04/2011 at 7:31 pm

    I like the way this reads. It has a nice ebb and flow like tides coming in and out. Very nice.

     
  5. margo roby

    29/04/2011 at 8:13 pm

    Thank you, James!

     

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